@CandyKiller oh goodness.. I was so caught up with this chapter I didn't notice the other one -.- silly me.... on with it :D and yeah.. keep on going ;)
apart from the few errors, this is a great story. It has a wonderful plot and is not cliche. I like the way you bring out the entire emotion in this...voted
Aww sad cute story, I love the story, listening to while reading for the full effect. I noticed a couple grammar errors though, nothing a reread couldn't fix.
You put a lot of emotion into this, so good job on that! You describe nicely. You do have some grammatical errors, so I'd suggest you edit. :) good luck!
Wow, great job with this! I wonder what happened between them, what did she do? you should continue this!
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