@Blueskylover "defenceless" should be "defenseless", "Earths" can be changed to "Earth's" . I hope I helped!! -Kortnie
I like this, it's very dramatic! I think the only improvement you could make is spellchecking it. -Kortnie
@Blueskylover Hope you don't mind if I put this in my library.... Mind checking out mine? House of the Desperate, Horror and Thriller
This is SO good!! I'll totally read on after this... SO POWERFUL. Amazing writer... Never stop!! Can't wait to see how this story unfolds... ~Ash
Amazing powerful prologue! I loved it, it's unusual for a prologue but that's why makes it so special! I congratulate you! This is amazing.
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