@Dinosaur_says_RAWR I'm not angry with you, I'm just pointing it out to be nice and so you can improve it. That's what reviews are for.
@Dinosaur_says_RAWR You wrote, "It just started to rain when i..." I've read a lot of articles and most say that it isn't.
The first I isn't capitalised, and you started with the weather, but your character descriptions are real good
This was really good, I hope you continue! Maybe make the chapters a little longer?
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