It's a nice start but you could use more description and detail. The plot also sounds like a good story ;)
It flows really good! Keep writing! I really like the title 'Dance To Death. Other than several simple errors really good!
i love the title for the story, nut there were a few errors which i noticed, but other than that it was good.
@VideoGAmer123 You were writing a lot of sentences like "she did this. She did that. That really messes up the flow, so I suggest you fix that.
the format is a little weird and confusing, but I like the idea of the story. It sort of reminds me of Black Swan :)
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