This is so funny. :)))) Nice characters too! *voted! You should separate the lines of the characters as well as diff. ideas in different paragraphs. :)
I like the story plot and it's very unique but try spacing out dialogue from narration.
I love your story!! You are an amazing writer :) I've been reading for a long long time...thank you so much for continuing your faboulous story :) <3
plz dont rewrite or give up on the story, its awesome the way it is!! XD
dont forget to write more!
yay uploaded after almost a year lol!. im gunna read it from the start coz i think i have forgotten bits lol. plz keep uploading i luv this story :)
Yeah!! Thank u thank u thank u. Great new chapters. Plz don't give up on this story. Its awesome. Flows great.
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