I like the name of the school. Just noticed a few grammar errors, for example it's "won't" not "wont" Keep writing.
Oh wow, I thought this was amazing! I really liked this, it was so intresting and got me hooked!
I really like it (: It's a nice beginning, and it totally sucked me in. You're a really talented writer and I hope you go far with this story :3
I liked it! Great beginning, I thought, with great description too! Keep up the good work!
i think more description cud be added but thats just me. besides that i think its really good. this deserves more reads and comment :)
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