Ok... I dont really know about describing the characters before you started. Maybe you could introduce them as you go along.
@emilystars1001 Really? You are? whoa! I can never imagine myself writing from a guy point of view.... I think I'll try sometimes..
great opening liked how u drew the readers in i liked how u started the >>>>>>>>> great character and concept.... keep up the good work
I like the story line but I find myself getting confused on what excactly is going on because it is all happening so fast xD But other then that it's good
Its a great idea and is good, but perhaps you could slow down the plot a bit? I like it though .
Would u mind checking out my stories? XD
There were a few errors actually. Instead of 'OMG', literally typing what it stands for, would've looked better.
Other than that, great! ;D
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