Beautiful Dancer

2 Part Story 369 Reads 21 Votes
bronxnyc By bronxnyc Updated 3 years ago
Spinning and turning,
Twisting and learning,
She's not one to hear the burning.
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Another short poem i wrote on a whim. :)
HonestLyre HonestLyre 3 months ago
I love the images! As she learns to dance and her love for it grows, everything around her crashes and burns. But she is the crown jewel for innocence. Art can take you away to the best of places.
MsChipmunk7 MsChipmunk7 3 months ago
I love both versions, but I like the feel of this one more. It gives a more personal tone to it. The first one is a bit impersonal. This one allows readers to relate to the dancer more. ♡ ♥ <3
MissAlice MissAlice a year ago
This is a rather lovely poem, I absolutely love it :)  It flows wonderfully and has a lot of hidden emotion.  You have a gift!  I could see this becoming a classic.
~Ash
MJLevitt MJLevitt 2 years ago
They are both excellent, I can't say which I like more because they are both wonderful. V
MJLevitt MJLevitt 2 years ago
Beautiful poem, love the flow to it and the juxtaposition of something as beautiful as dancing to something as horrible as war. V
hyperjudgement hyperjudgement 3 years ago
I think it was very interesting. The wording felt a little off at some points but I thought the format was very interesting and the concept was good too.