Raw [My Manifesto Poem]

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XxForgottenWhisperxX By XxForgottenWhisperxX Updated 2 years ago


                    

                    
Behind_The_Mask Behind_The_Mask 3 years ago
I loved it mainly because i can relate. you foot note at the bottem is so true. i am the one begging to be saved...
yogirl184 yogirl184 3 years ago
wow i really like the poem it made me realise how serious suicide really is.
Behind_Strings Behind_Strings 3 years ago
I am literally reading this while in in the hospital , waiting for an ambulance to take me to the mental institute for probation because of attemtp 
uicide.  Ironic
foreverhidion3 foreverhidion3 3 years ago
hmmm... I like this.
But...What if it ended...
Please don't forget.
Guns go off,
the thread breaks,
and I am 
nothing
but
raw.

I don't know, I felt like the word "raw" was very strong in this piece...and feel like it could close it a little more powerfully...?
lol
Or not...
Tell me what you think!
DesmondTiny DesmondTiny 3 years ago
This is really awesome and I can really relate to it!! Really awesome job I love it!