A bit too quick paced and I don't understand the spaces at the end. Lol. But this was so awesome! :D
OOOOOOO.....I like it.... :):):) It is very unique and original!!! Keep up the good work :):):) xx
Original topic :) The sentences are a little choppy though, but the point was made. Voting :)
not bad. you could go back and fix your tenses and redundancies. your story will flow a lot better.
Nice :3 I like the last line, it makes the reader want to know what on earth is going to happen next! I liked it <3
What an awesome and epic cliffhanger! This is really good, I keep thinking I've read it on Wattpad before.
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