I seriously agree with hyperbole. Carry on writing this way and you should seriously consider a career as a writer. I;m loving it!
I am seriously enjoying this story. I love the way you describe the differences of the mother. It is a really unique way of writing.
Your style is really unique! Love how you fit in all the details in.
"the small person all pink and wrinkly" I like that line, I don't know why. :P
I love it, short and simple. Don't reveal too much, (I am totally against Random-SinoSaur :X), this makes it more unique. <:
Poor girl.. I feel so sorry for her.. :(
Great story, and upload soon. And I think you deserve a vote ;)
The imagery is great :)
But check your punctuation as you're missing a few commas in places,
No spelling or grammatical mistakes that I can see.
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