I liked it:) it had parallel phrase and repetition. It shows how upset she is to have lost everything including what she gave up for him.
Don't take offensive to this at all because it just might be me. But the repetition of "slowly I..." Was really annoying to the point that I was cringing.
I only read the first paragraph of Jamie's P.O.V and I already hate his guts. Can't help but keep reading though.
He broke her that jackass. Lilly is such a great friend and she's really going to need her.
Ahhh this is such a great story!!!! You are a great author!!! My heart is hurting from how good this was just ahhhhh I can't even handle it.
Great beginning, I was so captured by it I can't wait to move on...which I will.. starting now :D
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