good start i like it. I like how u do reveal too much in the first chapter. good job!
@the-battles-we-fight haha ur prolly used to em anyway:P ....and omg cause who doesn't love chocolate chip? xD
Awesome start! I like the way the character opened up the story if that makes sense.. I love your style of writing too(;
'everyone had their own weird little way of doing things' i love that statement. i enjoyed the first chapter and am curious about the rest of the story.
great opening. Ur writing style is nice and it really grabbed my attention! reading on <3
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