neat ... well written ... interesting ... but 5 pages for a chapter is pretty long XD well done though ...
Sorry :L yikes I had no intention of coming out harsh! I'm really sorry . . . it was just supposed to be constructive feedback
This sounds like a reasonable and realistic story! :) I really like it thus far! You write really well! Keep writing! Voted.
I like the story so far, very good and very descriptive....quite a few grammatical errors but mines not perfect either aha!
You're a great writer! Very descriptive. :) I really love the idea! Keep up the great work! Voted<3
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