This was really beautiful and easy to picture. :) I loved your descriptions on everything. Everything was beautiful, and I loved the ending.
I like the vivid descriptions and vocabulary used in this short story. I like how I can picture the scene in my head.
I wish your story was longer you have such a unique perception of the world. This story is different which is what makes it great.
I love how there is so much intensity in your writing... just amazing.
Hope you write some more like this. Because are just SO good at this!!
I'm with Eve 96, this should be a lot longer to be a story! This is great work, and I'd love to see it played out...
Beautifully written! Amazing use of "show not tell" -- I love the twist at the end too. Makes me wonder who is the prey and who's the predator
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