It was good but there were many short and choppy sentences....all you really need to work on is that though so keep up the good work :)
Mmm spaghetti...very nice story:-) the first chapter is long by wattpad standards though...but very nice:-)
@dreamwriting2611 oooh, I see. lol, *facepalm* that explains it. Sorry, I'm a total dumbass tonight. Great work, though!
@dreamwriting2611 Sure. I always dedicate my chapters to writers I like. I would definately do it for you if you want... ?
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