The story feels rushed. The Doctors feelings also feel like they're developed to fast.
A sentence with no trial, it is that? I am not sure if I fully understand the end.
@ChungLing Sorry, I made a mistake. :P "when *you* write" "Have a goal *farther* than..."
Simple and well constructed. Just wish I could write as well as you. Thanks for your story.
@Sunshine-Lollypop ehh? well, it's still your choice. But I strongly suggest you continue with this. It's got AMAZING potential. x)
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