I think you've done a great job! Some tense problems here and there but you should be fine. ^^ To be honest, I don't find anything to critisize. :3 *voted
there were a few tense shifts in the beginning but u redeemed urself in the later story and made it amazing.
This is so well written! You really know how to draw the reader in! I love the cover and title of this too! So far i love everything about this =]
I love the title and the cover photo, I love your writing style, it is a very smooth story; I love it.
Such a wonderfuls story! You describe everything so well and that definitely makes me want to read more! I think you're a great writer!
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