Snatched (On Hold)

15 Part Story 6.1K Reads 163 Votes
wordgoddess By wordgoddess Updated 3 years ago
Light and darkness. 
    
    One does not know which force is stronger. Selene will come across the truth but, will pay the price. 
    
    Can Selene fight the darkness or will she too be erased from our memories.
You had a few grammar mistakes here and there, but none were like, extremely terrible. The concept seemed pretty interesting. Great job.
@wordgoddess No prob! I'm going to read the rest later, cause I don't have time now! :(
This is really good and I thought it moved at a good pace. There were some grammar mistake though, but they were overlook-able. :)
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The ending was good-it was very last minute and makes the reader want to move on. Good job :)
I thought you did a very good job for the start of your story. This was thought-provoking and suspenseful. You should most definitely continue since you make the reader want to keep reading :)
I love this! I like Rick, he seems cute and sweet lol. I think you should maybe describe the friends a little better and break the diologue into new lines when the person speaks. But besides that, I like it :). It makes you wanna keep reading, which I am! It's going to my library!