Sorry, I'm sure it's actually a good read, but it needs some serious editing. I could barely read the first few sentences. :/
Hmm. You really need to edit this. It has promise, but the errors in your sentence structures take away from the book. It makes it hard to read.
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| Name | Jennifer |
| Location | Ireland |
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