Again, this is an AMAZING poem. It's so breathtaking and lovely. I simply can't give you any advice, you're brilliant!
we die so young in our foreverness
forever means now
it doesn't make sense. but they really aren't promising anything
thats AMAZING!!! SOOO GOOD! :) hey umm if its not to much to ask would you mind checking mine? im just starting to write them and could use some feedback?
W-O-W. You could be a professional! I connected this to Twilight, some parts seemed very vampire-y to me. Team Edward or Jacob?
this is really really good! awsome job with rhyming....i can never do such...keep it up u r an amazing poet!!
your poems are so engaging! i get drawn into them and really connect with the emotion :)
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