Again, this is an AMAZING poem. It's so breathtaking and lovely. I simply can't give you any advice, you're brilliant!
we die so young in our foreverness
forever means now
it doesn't make sense. but they really aren't promising anything
I love you works, they are all so heartfelt and wonderful. also live your word choice. check out some of my works.
Read most of them.. I love the word choice you used! You also captured a lot of emotion in each line of word. Very well put together! :)
Sometimes the rhyming scheme changes, breaking the flow of the poem, but otherwise it's really good love poem
You really really know how to touch some one, this got me right in the heart. You seem really mature and talented. *votes*
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