Losielette And the Boy With The Mechanical Heart

62 Part Story 205K Reads 6K Votes
Danni Allan By x_Luminous_x Updated 8 days ago
Losielette is a quiet girl living in 1924, whose life is comfortable, yet dull. That is, until she's kidnapped by a rogue time traveller  on the night of her wedding.
    Her captor is a dark-haired, wild looking boy with eyes like ice, and a personality to match. He's ruthless, stubborn, does what ever he pleases, and will stop at nothing to try and break Losielette's spirits.
    The only thing she knows about him? He's on the run from the law and faces a possible death sentence if he's caught. He refuses to tell her even what his real name is. 
    When she finds herself pulled into his life of crime, her life becomes chaotically action packed. Accompanied by a pink-haired girl, and a boy so handsome he can hypnotize people with his looks, the four of them travel through the plains of time, running from whoever wants her kidnapper dead.
    But how can she see cope with travelling hundreds of years in the future which she should have never lived to see?
    Current cover by @weeknder
@x_Luminous_x No, no that's fine. It's already really captivating. :D (And almost every story I've written is the same way; I started at fourteen in first person and only changed the POV. >_< I'm just too lazy to edit.)
Your writing is good af. And you gotta deal with it!!!
                                    @cas_tielle (Korra reference hehe)
This was a great read dude! I enjoyed the emotional roller coaster in this chapter and how the events spiraled further into madness. Who is this woman who looks like Lois (sorry can't spell her name just yet) from the future? Time travel is always tricky so I salute you for tackling it ;)
Agree with Katrin on this one, it's really not flowery at all. It was a great start - slap bang right into the action and already encouraging some sympathy for your main character and sneakily getting everyone to root for her 
Btw I was real fond of your old cover with the pink font, why'd change it, i mean this own is nice but the old one grew on me  and I seriously need to catch up on this story
How did you come up with this idea? I guess what I mean to ask is what was your inspiration?