I LOVED THE PROLOGUE. i didn't notice any spelling mistakes. ummm...i guess that all.
the story was very engaging.
Loads of action in the prologue! Great start! It's intriguing and makes, me, a reader, want more :D
the Rimineers seem like they'd be pains in the butt. :) I like the invention though.
OMGGG you left me off a cliff hanger, i like the way you write and you have an interesting plot point !
I love it! I was so shocked when It revealed that it was in disneyland! Nice story!
Haha, Rimineers, spiffy name =P The wording was a little sketchy at times, though. Other than that it was good.
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