A good premise and some decent writing here, but needs a little more editing, in my opinion. It's good to give a little more depth to the main character, even this early, so we care about the pain he experiences.
The beginning of your chapter seems a little choppy, try making it flow better; maybe read it aloud to yourself. Anyway, your story sounds really creative, keep it up!
wow, this is really good! it's going straight to my library! =)
I'm loving it so far....oh my gosh I love alien invasions...... =)
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