55 Part Story 629K Reads 6.9K Votes
geumjandi By geumjandi Completed
Julian Sloan is the brother the famous business man Rafael Sloan[from my first story] his ambition is to be a teacher. He's a famous model in the whole country. Plus.. He's a player, he's never serious about her girlfriends. Until he met a girl name Rhoda Georgette Dena. A 17 year old teen age student of him. Her innocent face and the feminine scent of her driving him crazy!
U need to spell check u have tons of errors and it makes reading and keeping on track kinda impossible, so please try and proof read.
I shut my eyes and started to skip to see what happened and return back
you need to slow down and rewrite this. good potential.. but i dont want to keep reading because its too grammacally incorrect and doesnt have a strong base. you sound like a twelve year old in this?
Its really embarrasing seeing george making herself out hahahaha
OMG!! I am gonna die of embarrassment if i were her..that was hilarious!!
Wow, I honestly think that Gorgie and Kristoff should get together, I mean serioiusly??