It's very well described. the bodyguard description was my favourite. :) I enjoyed reading it.
It was nicely written. I didn't see any gramar mistakes or anything. Has a nice cute picture of how the main character is as far as personality.
its a perfect length for a first chapter, and was well written...it seemed a little slow but no spelling mistakes!
Other than some grammar mistakes, it was really good! So realsitic tiger and I loved it. Will be adding to reading list! I loved your imagery!!!
Great start i'm really interested, i'm adding this to my library will read the rest when i have time :)
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| Name | Brittney Coon |
| Location | Backstage to a Rock Concert in Arizona |
| Member Since | Mar 14, 2011 |
| Votes Received | 6,998 |