Falling Apart - Copyright © 2011
first story of a trilogy(hopefully):
Karneyah is a young girl living the life of a normal teenager. She is an aspiring athlete and a straight A student. She has experienced heartache before and doesn't want to feel it ever again. She feels as if the whole world is on her shoulders when her circle of people she trusts, starts to get smaller. Someone special enters her life and sticks by her, through her downfalls. But it's this same person that breaks her, making her world Fall Apart....
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its really well writen, a good outline. all u need to do is goo back and edit a little bit. but other then that well done
Yeah i agree with everyone here but dont give up i like the idea of it! Keep going! return the favour? NightSpirit,x
In the beginning, you began most of your sentences with "I", which made it sound repetitive. But other than that, great job!
I agree with everyone else; it has potential, but needs more details and less slang :)
Wait I don't even think it was part of the story, it is the paragraph right above the line
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