Marked and Dangerous (On Hold)

23 Part Story 4.4K Reads 143 Votes
caz_be_crazy By caz_be_crazy Updated 2 years ago
Deandra is working on a case that involved over 30 murders. The only thing all the murders seem to have in common is that they are completely and totally random.

But what happens when a lead points Deandra and her friends in a different direction? One Direction, the new boyband, the one Deandra's beautiful four year old daughter, Chloe, is so crazed about, the band that has girls swooning over them 24/7, the band that has top level security at all times...

Deandra finds it hard to believe that this new band could possibly be the murders, but what can she do when all the clues seem to lead in One Direction?
XeniaBolton XeniaBolton 2 years ago

I love this heaps and heaps and you've started the story so strongly. I am literally HOOKED already!!
DarkElementsXo DarkElementsXo 2 years ago
The summary is amazing, it seems so professional. This chapter is the same; very well written and flows really well. The dialogue is done extremely well and the descriptions are excellent :)
TatianaYoung TatianaYoung 2 years ago
The words are fine all you have to worry about in the future is the context just don't change that it wil be fine, not to mention you added a few exxtra words to my vocabulary. XD
TatianaYoung TatianaYoung 2 years ago
Thriller moment....I want to know more
and I sense that you are an aussie some of the words are a bit confusing.  But after looking at the context I understood them just something to think about.
TatianaYoung TatianaYoung 2 years ago
Just wanted to say your description made me feel like I was reading the back of a novel, loved it.
daydreaminarigb daydreaminarigb 2 years ago
not a fan of mystery story but i think i might read dis 1 on