Hellfire

4 Part Story 3.2K Reads 201 Votes
ohmyfudge By ohmyfudge Updated 2 years ago
Charlie is fearful of who he truly is. For when night falls he become something of anyone's nightmare. And despite being somewhere in the back of his mind, watching everything he does - he can not control who or what controls him. All he knows is if he doesn't find a way to release this demon inside him, sooner or later he will become this evil completely.
Catty_Dee Catty_Dee 2 years ago
This is very interesting so far, the quote fits this perfectly so far. I haven't really read a horror story before so I don't know what expect but yours blew me away. This was also very eerie. I can't wait to read more! :)
yiddishpablo yiddishpablo 2 years ago
@LilMissSteampunk Thanks, I really like leaving helpful comments because I enjoy getting them.
DeSotoSlaughter DeSotoSlaughter 2 years ago
you're really good at descriptions :D that's a good trait to have while writing
MickeyPhelps MickeyPhelps 2 years ago
Very good prologue :) Really kept my attention! I also like how you put a quote at the beginning. For some odd reasons, I like stories like that :P
Keep up the amazing work!
Will continue reading :D
Really effective prologue, lovely and mysterious and instantly makes the reader want to continue.  Good description and the lack of dialogue actually works well. I can't fault it one bit.
Sianie1990 Sianie1990 2 years ago
Wow I love this prologue. I don't usually read horrors/thrillers.

The main thing I loved about this was how mysterious it was, it has definitely made me want to read on!

Voted :D