Okay first off I absolutely love the short film/song thing on the side and second this sounds like a great story!:D
nice introduction you are on the right track. your introduction makes people want to read!
This is definitely different to a lot of stuff I've read, I think that it is really interesting and great job for writing so well! :3
I am really really enjoying this and have only read a few parts. I love the pace of it and yet there is enough detail to portray the scenes! Really well done.
This is a interesting plot, or at least interesting sounding. I like the way you wrote it. Very nice. No mistakes :)
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| Name | John Murray McKay |
| Location | Pretoria, South Africa |
| Member Since | Apr 24, 2012 |
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