14 Part Story 37.8K Reads 1.1K Votes
NaTTyKiinz By NaTTyKiinz Updated a year ago
Draco Malfoy and Hermione Granger Novel. It's only your shadow filling the room, arriving too late and leaving too soon.
WendyWrites WendyWrites 2 years ago
Very interesting hook...I actually missed it the first time I read Chapter One. Where you choose to start and end this excerpt works really well to attract readers and get them to read on to see how it comes about and how it all ends. Well done. Voted.
Rainyday1209 Rainyday1209 2 years ago
Wow this description gives total and utter shivers down the spine. I really think this is going to be good. I love your descriptions and this flowed just so perfectly :D
Bauhinia Bauhinia 2 years ago
This is a fantastic way to begin the story! The emotions and descriptions were very realistic, and I'm left wanting to read more! Which is what I'm just about to do now!
StarPaine StarPaine 2 years ago
woooooow..great. I liked your choice of characters. I like them since chilhood.
KshemaKurup KshemaKurup 2 years ago
I think you picked the perfect scene to draw the reader in. :)
Indigold Indigold 2 years ago
Your trailer is amazing and so is your excerpt..I've never read a harry potter book(watched the movies though..ok please don't give out to me!)but I think I'll really want to read this one!