Cluster Roan

1 Part Story 168 Reads 10 Votes
August Paige By TheButtonWorkshop Updated 3 years ago
Many years into the future, our world has survived generations of battles and wars.  Now, follow 16 year old Camella Cosette, where earth now consists of five large clusters of islands spread out over the globe - the aftermath of these battles - as she is caught up in yet another new war. After Camella's Cluster is attacked, she must fight to survive and find her missing brother and father. However, with her father a high member in the Clusters government, Camella is a wanted person. Hiding is the only way to remain unnoticed and safe, until she stumbles upon the help of one boy and his mismatch of a family.
I like this story a lot.  It's very visual and atmospheric.  You have a really wonderful sense for world building! My only critique is to try writing without a passive voice (was/seems).  Otherwise, keep up the good work.  Can't wait to read more!
How is this not one of the top read stories? I honestly love it. After the first paragraph I loved it. Keep writing, I can't wait to read more!
Wow! This is great so far! XD It gets you in straight at the start with the whole bombing thing and it feels like its goingbti get really exiting in the next chapter!!!!!!!! Your really talented! XD XD XD