City of Diam

3 Part Story 974 Reads 16 Votes
Biminimary By Biminimary Updated a year ago
An underwater city surrounded of mysterious creatures that live in this world. Men are full of hatred and the only thing they want is to destroy them. Two worlds that are collapsing they are determining in one thing that will destroy one of them for good.  Avani is looking why they hate them; by looking for an answer she found something unexpected. Could she change the flow of the future or she accepts what is coming.
SamMedina SamMedina 2 years ago
There's a typo in your blurb 'if' should be 'is.' 
Very, very interesting story, though :)
Eliahsneakers Eliahsneakers 2 years ago
@Biminimary I have to confess that I read it twice and I find some grammar mistakes that could be corrected. But it is a great plot that needs more develope. Is like entering to a new world unknow to us but still familiar in someway. I want more of this story really I do. :)
RedFeather RedFeather 2 years ago
That's cool! Diam means quiet or silence in my language! And all the little phrases are in my language too, or sort of.
TrivStar TrivStar 2 years ago
I like the idea and i love this genre so you know. I agree with what people have said--break it up into paragraphs :-)