If It Doesn't Kill You

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a-star-to-steer-by By a-star-to-steer-by Updated a year ago
Assumption: Dianna Moreau and Ariel Richards are two average teen girls.
WRONG.
Dianna is an expert in the art of deduction. Call her Nancy Drew, or perhaps Sherlock Holmes, if you will. Ariel is an expert violinist and Dianna's unlikely partner. 
Her partner in crime solving.
A mysterious chain of polished, careful crimes are being committed throughout New York City. The only trail the culprit leaves is one of murder and theft.
Nobody can find a clue.
That is, until Dianna and Ariel visit the crime scene.
But, really, if the police can't figure out who the heck is doing all this, can two sixteen year old girls?
Maybe. . .if they follow one guideline:
If it doesn't kill you. . .do it.
Justafeeling16 Justafeeling16 2 years ago
Cool twist on the character. Usually the cooler character is the main one. Huh, I think I understand you a little on that part. :D I love mystery, crime solving and action~ I VOTED AND ADDED YOURS TO MY READING LIST. :) I THINK YOU HAVE A FAN! <3
unfledged unfledged 2 years ago
Good start! I really like how you've written this! I can almost imagine this as a crime tv show!
TheGreatDance TheGreatDance 2 years ago
Kara_writes pointed out the only mistake I saw, which was the capital after dialogue, didn't need to be there. This was a very interesting start, Dianna sounds awesome! :)
WildRose393 WildRose393 2 years ago
Diana seems to be a very interesting and confident character.
Love the description, and the story flowed pretty nicely :)
*voted*
Trigirl262 Trigirl262 2 years ago
It reminds me a bit of Nancy Drew :)  It's written in a very unique style that I find myself liking more and more as I read.
Sierra256715 Sierra256715 2 years ago
You write well, and the atmosphere is set immediatley. Good length, but I think you could do with a decent cover ;) Like the names of the characters as well. Voted