Wow, you had such a great opening! I kind of feel bad for Molly, even if she wasn't listening, but you've sucked me in for sure.
The opening line caught my attention and made me want to read more. Great description and language. :)
I think I've never felt so mixed emotioned in my life... strangely I like it. I'ma keep reading on, Voted XD !!
This is really well written! It surely caught my attention and kept it through out. Sorry it took so long for my to read this! voted(:
I really enjoyed the introduction. :D It's fluid, and the pacing is really good. I can't spot any typos or grammatical errors, so yey! ♥ Voting! :D
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