awwww, it is sad tht J K Rowling never talked about the twins in their first year, just the second :(
Looks good. Just what I was looking for. But maybe you could like use different words and stuff? But it's still good!
I thought it was good for a first chapter. :) a little skechty but you'll improve so no worries! But a good work :)
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