Whisper

9 Part Story 3.1K Reads 106 Votes
Alliex By Alliex Updated 6 months ago
After the death of her mother, Aria moves to a different state to start a new life. With an apartment that is falling apart and a job with little money, she struggles to cope. Her friend and co-worker, Paige, asks her to accompany her to a night club. Unsure, Aria decides to go anyway. In the rough areas of downtown, the night club Eternity is situated in a dark alley way. Once Aria and Paige arrive, Aria starts to relax. However, after only being in the club for an hour a gang burst in. Pale skin, sharp teeth and red eyes, Aria runs for her life away from these creatures. Will she escape or will she fall prey to the vampire's whisper?
loulou1976 loulou1976 2 years ago
Great prologue.The song really did me in even though I just listened to the melody.It brought the grief in your words to their heights. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Pink_Candy Pink_Candy 2 years ago
Wow, this is an amazing start! You wouldn't believe how much your writing has improved since your first story. It was always great but this is brilliant! Gonna be an awesome story i can alteady tell :)
Ronak15 Ronak15 2 years ago
Great prologue :D the story is quite hooking and i felt sad of the fact that her mom died :( anyways nice plot and hope u do gud :)
CaoimheGrace CaoimheGrace 2 years ago
This is a very interesting prologue
The final sentence was very hooking and imagery was great
Overall it's really good as a start(:
OhShizzItsErika OhShizzItsErika 2 years ago
I read the prologue and it was very intense. It sounds really interesting and sucks that her mom dies. I love prologues like this because I'm tempted to read the rest of the story lol. I like how it's not too long either. Great detail ^.^
crazychic264 crazychic264 2 years ago
i love how descriptive your story is! it really gives it more character. and the hanging suspense is awesome! :) voted :D