Blunder

2 Part Story 6.6K Reads 199 Votes
Sorria Rothens By Sorria Rothens Updated 3 years ago
Arial's life seems to be on a downward spiral. Her mother's health is declining yet she still continues to turn to alcohol; Arial's home is under foreclose and the majority  their assets have been seized by the bank, penniless and with no where to turn they decide to contact Abrial's estranged Aunt Helena. Helena proposes that Arial and her mother move into her estate in a small northern surf town. There she meets Ash, a   big wave surfer with an even bigger heart and Misty, the fisherman's daughter who just so happens to be a near spiting image of Arial. Will Arial be able to uncover the truth behind her aunt and her mother's fall out, and how dose Misty fit into the picture? And will Arial be able to let go of her fears and  fall in love? Find out in this compelling romantic mystery.
Interesting, well because I'm bored and this sounds pretty good, I'll keep reading :)
I like Leah, she seems cool! Anyway, i like you're writing style, it's very different and your fluency is amazing! Your descriptions are amazing and your characters seem so realistic and it's so sad how they're being evicted! But great chapter! :) Oh and nice dialogue too!
Omg. her hair and the school omg lol. This is good, sad but good. The leah girl, her bff or whatever seems like a really good friend. I really like this story. very nice job.
I love your descriptions! You have a very unique writing style that is very intruiging. I loved the dialogue with the characters, it made them very real and the situation very real. Well done! :)
This is very realistic and I love your dialogues! Nice job! Your plot and storyline are great so far :)
I'm not usually into teen fiction, but this one is pretty good :) I like your dialogue, probably your strong point :)