In Myself (Probably Never Gonna Finish... You should read my new stuff)

4 Part Story 475 Reads 48 Votes
I was once Avocadobaby now you can call me Ny or something By TheBeautyOfGrace Completed
Xander is your average 17 year old rich boy who goes to your average snobby private school, aside from the fact that he can see the future. Miria is you average awkward new girl, aside from the fact that she caught Xander's attention.
When Xander discovers that her future doesn't look to bright, consider that fact that she's going to be kidnapped, he becomes obsessed with protecting her. What will happen to Miria? What else will Xander discover?
I lobe how you start it. The details and dialogue are pretty even. Sad at part... Good job!
I saw a few grammar errors. Such as "Your" it was supposed to be 'you're' which is short for 'you are'. And in the exact same sentance, you missed puncaction. Other than that, nice story you've got here.

-Cade x3
I like your names :) I find it hard to come up with names for my stories :P Your writing esd really fluent in some parts, and choppy in others. I saw one or two run on sentences that kind of bothered me a little, but this story is still good :)
Wow! this is super good! girl keep up on this! seriously and it realy deserved a vote!
This was really good! Most of it went smoothly! I love the names you picked too. Very unique and clever! :) Some parts were a little choppy though, nonetheless, this is great. :)
Ahhh, I love this already D:< The beginning was just lovely! I knew this was going to be good from the moment, I first aid my eyes on it lol. But I will admit, I got confused at some parts but because I knew the story line was able to understand it.

Can't wait for more :P!