Earth Bound

9 Part Story 3K Reads 220 Votes
citydreamer By citydreamer Updated 3 years ago
Delaney Taylor is a guardian angel in training. In all her eighteen years of existence she has managed to be over looked when the time comes to make the annual visit to Earth. Her elders say that she is too young and immature. But on her eighteenth birthday a mission arrives at the pearly white gates that can only be fulfilled by her. Delaney must become a regular high school student at Fieldwaters Academy and find out why so many students are going missing. It's not going to be as easy as she first assumed though when she finds herself fascinated by the schools heartthrob, Brody Collins. His strange, alluring human qualities might just be enough to distract her from her mission. And if that is the case, who else will go missing while her back is turned? All she knows is that if she fails she could be banished from Heaven and be earth bound forever.
This is a wonderful prolog, short 'n sweet as well as having great detail that will really help set up the reader to better understand the story.
OMG. Isn't that a little too harsh for her?! She's not even a full Guardian Angel yet, and she's already given such a difficult task?! Not using wings nor magic?! Poor angel... ): I really liked the trailer. (: And the song is from an anime!!! xDD
i love guardian angel stories!  also, god put a lot of pressure on her shoulders haha
You make the humans sound . . . Odd , well we are odd creatures , lollol (:
                                    
                                    Well , I like the title of the story , & nice prologue too ! Man , If I was Delaney , I'd be like freaking out possibly ? (:
                                    
                                    Nice idea , fantasy kind , good luck on the rest of this (:
I watched the trailer! It was so good! I liked how lots of the scenes were from vampire diaries. Anyways, like @DeviationFromTheNorm said, the message from God was weird. God doesn't banish people from Heaven. LOL. That's probably the fantasy part. Anyways, it was good. 
                                    Good luck and happy writing!
I liked this for the most part. The message from "God" was a little strange, though. It sounded like one of those agent briefings in the "Incredible's" movie. I just can't picture any higher power presenting a mission like that. 
                                    
                                    Other than that, it was a good start!