Sorry to write on your story but i was wondering if you can read my story
I liked it, but I think you need to add more emotions and spread out the story MORE INFo
Otherwise great story loved it xx
Great start so far :3 its emotional and too the point just how I like it! <3
I like this i agree with VHeart9123 too about paragraphs and dialogue but its your (choice ok) but otherwise brilliant!!
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