great story and great description but few errors fix them otherwise loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! keep updating.
Nice flow and nice story line! Excellent work now that your first language isn't English :) Good Job! :)
You had some errors, and your structure confused me a few times, but other than that, you did a good job! :)
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| Name | Rosey |
| Location | Trying to be the next MASTER CHEF. |
| Birthday | Mar 02 |
| Member Since | May 31, 2012 |
| Votes Received | 318 |