Hmm greatly written and pretty interesting, but I lacked an image in my head! Add some deailsof where the main character is etc. Voted!
A little more description would be nice, the sentences seem kind of choppy. But it's a nice read, I'm going to continue it! :D
Ok excellent prolog! Your character development was evident from the start, as was your writings natural flow. :)
I like how right from the beginning you described the main character. I will keep reading. :)
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