I love the storyline so far and how you wrote it! You had great descriptions and great grammar!
Nice plot! I loved your writing style because it really kept me interested:) Your dialogue is very smooth and the descriptions are great! Loved it!
I thought this was a believable males point of view. Well written and good attention to detail.
That was surprising. I thought his dad would be cold since he ordered, not asked, him to go to the office. :P
This was really good! Your writing so far is simple, yet captivating. An easy read is sometimes great. ;) Awesome job!
Very original. I love that it's from a guys perspective.That's something unique :P The beginning really caught my attention! Good job!<3
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