I love the flow of your story. The description is spot-on and I like how natural your dialogue is :)
Oh, the plot is really interesting. So she is the bad and beautiful.. hm, I'm wonderign what is going to happen next. Update soon!
I think that this story is well written but you should just check you grammar a little, there are not many huge grammatical issues though. Good job! :D
This was really good, and interesting. Your vocabulary blew me away , and I was just hooked on this story from the first paragraph. Good job! x -Hallie c':
ooh i like this. its very interesting and the fact she could kill with her kiss is awesome. x
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