The Dreary Thoughts

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Ryptyq Ikarus AccuviZion By RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ Updated 3 years ago
I thought I'd experiment and try telling a story through a poem. Please comment and tell me what you thing. Any suggestions will be helpful! :)
really nice flow, but its sad... but that doesnt bother me much :| i thikn its good to have different poems for different emotions, and you did really well... voted!
@RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ 
                                    No problem! You did well, and that's nice your friends helped you. Hope to read more poems from you. =)
@RyptyqIkarusAccuviZ 
                                    This is a really good poem. You expressed the emotions very well. Especially when he wished for death and wondered how life would be without him. Your rhyming is great and flowed nicely, and it's hard to rhyme.