I liked the suspense and how little detail you gave here. You make me want to read on. This seems like an interesting story so I will add to my library!
Woah! An amazing and suspenseful beginning :) A nice cliffhanger ending too :P Loving the cast list :D Voted and reading on :P
I really love the introduction, it's really well done and the way you ended makes me want to read more (: Voted!
You definetly didn't shy away with some action! This was a nice start and I can tell you're a good writer. Your character is quite interesting, too. :)
this is really nice, the way they had their conversation, so realistic ! great work
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