Great start, though you really shouldn't have bold letters much during the story. haha. I really like the story so far though, voted. :)
Great first chappie! The lines were just a bit distracting, but once you get past them, it's great. I saw no grammar mistakes what so ever!
A little short, but well written. I liked the freshness you held in this part. I think the lines are unnecessary, though. They're a bit distracting.
It's pretty good but a few transitions might be nice. The description is well written though.
Good job, this was funny and well written, I liked how you said "And I blow out my candles on February 20." That was unique xD Voted c:
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