the story is nice so far:) just gotta tweak your grammars then you're good to go:)
It's a great intro and I love how this just sucks readers when they're reading it. It's not my type of genre but I must say that it's pretty well written :D
This was good. Kind of reminds me of the movie "Bring It On", which I love. I like Laurie a lot, she seems really cool and I love her name. Awesome job!
This was a good start I like it . Although there were just a few grammatical errors, its nothing you cant fix with a little edit :) You've got my vote!
A few grammar mistakes, but nothin tht u cant fix, either way a really good story!
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