This was really good. I liked how you added her flashbacks of herself with her dad and mom when she was drowning. This had me really interested. Good luck!:)
It was good and I love the shifting.. it was very clear and vivid.. a great start for a story.. really captures the attention of the reader..
This is a really interesting introduction :) It really catches the eye of the reader in my opinion :) I loved reading it :) Voted
hey nice work with ur intro...its gripping .....BTW romance and horror is my fav part .....so realy enjoyed it yet....rest when u post next chap...
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